incorporate early feedback

00XX-lorawan-committee.md

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 The proposed change of frequency plan for Australia has highlighted some major deficiencies on how the DEWI LoRaWAN committee is being selected and how it has been governed.
 
 This HIP suggests a number of improvements in the following areas
-1. Selection of members - improving diversity
+1. Selection of members
 2. Declaration of conflict of interest
 3. Governance procedures
 4. Ethics guidelines
@@ -21,14 +21,17 @@ This HIP suggests a number of improvements in the following areas
 # Motivation
 [motivation]: #motivation
 
-Changes that affect whole countries and regions should never be decided without input from the region which will have to live with the effects of such a decision.
+Wide-ranging (technical) changes that affect whole countries and regions should never be decided without informed debate and input from the region(s) which will have to live with the effects of such decisions. Proper governance procedures are required to ensure that due care is taken
 
 # Stakeholders
 [stakeholders]: #stakeholders
 
-The only body directly affected by this HIP is the DEWI LoRaWAN committee.
-However, the wider Helium ecosystem will be affected indirectly by decisions made in this committee. 
-Which is the reason why selection and governance of this committee are so crucial.
+There are two (2) stakeholder groups with this HIP:
+ - DEWI LoRaWAN Committee
+    - A clear governance structure will support the DEWI LoRaWAN committee to ensure strong objective,sustainable and inclusive growth, without bias and conflict.
+ - Wider Helium Ecosystem
+    - Without a clear articulated governance structure decisions made will inadvertedly create unintended consequeces. Such decisions without adequate consultation have the potential to create critical user issues and harm growth, which is the reason why selection and governance of this committee are so crucial.
+
 
 * Community and stakeholder engagement
 We are reaching out to members
@@ -41,11 +44,11 @@ We are reaching out to members
 
 
 ## Guiding principles of the committee
-The committee will:
+The committee has a responsiblity too:
  - operate in a transparent, timely and accountable manner at all times
  - communicate clearly and regularly with stakeholders and the DEWI as appropriate
  - adopt existing LoRa Alliance standards where applicable
- - act in conformance with the relevant regulatory bodies in each region
+ - act in conformance with the relevant regulatory bodies in each regionReport to wider Helium Community via meeting minutes and / or communiques on meeting outcomesReport to wider Helium Community via meeting minutes and / or communiques on meeting outcomesReport to wider Helium Community via meeting minutes and / or communiques on meeting outcomesReport to wider Helium Community via meeting minutes and / or communiques on meeting outcomes
  - endeavour to reach consensus within the committee, taking into account the views of all members.
 
 
@@ -60,20 +63,24 @@ The committee’s recommendations must:
 
 
 ## Membership
+Committee membership is critical to the transparency and capability of the committee for effective and independent in decision making.
+
 The committee must consist of at least:
  - an independent chair (not connected to either DEWI or Helium Inc)
- - three LoRaWAN and/or RF engineering experts, to ensure appropriate technical expertise is maintained
-species issues
+ - three LoRaWAN and/or RF engineering experts, to ensure appropriate technical expertise is maintained specific issues
  - one person with a practical understanding of the operational, technical and logistical facets
  - one standards development/regulation specialist.
 
-Other external experts and participants may be invited by the chair to discuss particular agenda items.
+ The committee should engage other external experts and participants invited by the chair as required and determined by the agenda.
+ The committee has the opportunity to establish working groups (may be topic or region specific) to provide advice the committee.
+
 
 
 ## Eligibility requirements and declarations of personal interests (conflicts of interest)
-Each member is required to make a declaration confirming they met the eligibility requirements upon their appointment to the committee. As part of each contract, members must continue to comply with the
-eligibility requirements.
-During the operation of the committee, members are to declare to the chair all known actual or potential conflicts of interest as soon as they become aware of the conflict. The initial declaration of eligibility made to the DEWI prior to joining the committee and subsequent statements of personal interest will be deemed to be a ‘standing statement’ for all meetings of the committee.
+Each member is required to make a declaration confirming they met the eligibility requirements upon their appointment to the committee. As part of each contract, members must continue to comply with eligibility requirements.
+
+During the operation of the committee, members are to declare to the chair all known actual or potential conflicts of interest as soon as they become aware of the conflict. Each meeting should contain a standard agenda item to allow for actual and percieved acknowledgement.
+The initial declaration of eligibility made to the DEWI prior to joining the committee and subsequent statements of personal interest will be deemed to be a ‘standing statement’ for all meetings of the committee.
 At each meeting, members are to advise of any new actual or potential conflicts of interest arising in respect of issues on the meeting agenda. These should be recorded in the minutes of the meeting,
 along with the course of action taken in relation to managing the conflict of interest.
 Where a conflict of interest is declared by a member on a particular agenda item, the chair and remaining committee members are to consider the nature and extent of the conflict and adopt one of
@@ -110,6 +117,7 @@ The independent chair is expected to:
  - ensure the committee undertakes appropriate record keeping of decisions and actions
  - provide final approval of committee meeting papers and recommendations
  - provide progress updates and reporting to DEWI.
+ - report to wider Helium community via meeting minutes and / or communiques on meeting outcomes
 
 ## Reporting arrangements
 The committee, through the chair, will report to DEWI. In addition to their final recommendations the committee will provide a report that outlines their consultation process, issues raised by stakeholders and their deliberations in reaching their recommendations to DEWI.
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 - Why is this design the best in the space of possible designs?
 
 No other proposals have been available. Widest possible community feedback will be sought to consider in this proposal
+Best practice governance provides strong platform for growth and sustainablity
 
 - What is the impact of not doing this?
 
 Poor decision making and unneccesary disruption of the ecosystem due to such decisions.
+Regional disruption and potential disconnect 
 
 # Unresolved Questions
 [unresolved]: #unresolved-questions
@@ -168,4 +178,8 @@ There are no backwards compatibility issues. The only potential issue is how to
 
 What metrics can be used to measure the success of this design?
 
--[TODO]
+- Future decision making and the metrics to engage in these processes
+- Future opportunties for growth
+- Faith of current Helium investors in regions
+- Engagement by community in future decisions
+- Alignment to best practice and possibility to lead by example